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I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what आप think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t आप see?” She कहा icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his पालना and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the पालना and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the पालना and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are आप saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They कहा that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And आप think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil कहा flatly, “He obviously has your आग using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what आप think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t आप see?” She कहा icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his पालना and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the पालना and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the पालना and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are आप saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They कहा that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And आप think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil कहा flatly, “He obviously has your आग using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
January 16, 1815
Journal,
We have gotten fortunate, Journal! Nastea has found coats in the broken down train. She sits द्वारा Sasha now, covering her in them. And she took one for herself as well. I can see color returning to Sasha’s cheeks. Nastea coughs harshly, shivering nervously. Her toes are turning blue, and one has already fallen off. We slept in the train last night, getting as much warmth as we could. We have to start to हटाइए tomorrow, find shelter. The berries Nastea fed Sasha seem to have made Sasha a lot sicker than she was before. She’s coughing up blood now. The snow around her is stained with red and pink. I attempted to make a आग earlier, and let me tell आप journal, it didn’t work out. It’s much to cold to start flames. For every time the आग ignites, it extinguishes, the harsh winds blowing it out. I’m losing my teeth, journal. Nastea can’t talk anymore, and her and Sasha’s hair is mostly gone. Journal, what’s happening to us?
Bye Journal,
Nadia
Journal,
We have gotten fortunate, Journal! Nastea has found coats in the broken down train. She sits द्वारा Sasha now, covering her in them. And she took one for herself as well. I can see color returning to Sasha’s cheeks. Nastea coughs harshly, shivering nervously. Her toes are turning blue, and one has already fallen off. We slept in the train last night, getting as much warmth as we could. We have to start to हटाइए tomorrow, find shelter. The berries Nastea fed Sasha seem to have made Sasha a lot sicker than she was before. She’s coughing up blood now. The snow around her is stained with red and pink. I attempted to make a आग earlier, and let me tell आप journal, it didn’t work out. It’s much to cold to start flames. For every time the आग ignites, it extinguishes, the harsh winds blowing it out. I’m losing my teeth, journal. Nastea can’t talk anymore, and her and Sasha’s hair is mostly gone. Journal, what’s happening to us?
Bye Journal,
Nadia
The pookie fell from a पेड़
upon hitting the ground he farted
scared at his own flatulence he tried climbing up the tree. But for every branch he grabbed he tooted. and for every twig he broke, he farted.
farting all the way up, pookie climed that tree. He had to make it to the चोटी, शीर्ष आप see, cause that where pookie's make pee. Relief was almost in reach for pookie. till a stiring occurred within.. a rumbling sensation, and pookie knew.. with a tear, that he couldn't hold it in.
Till this दिन those who were near कहा it sounded like a cow mooing. The momentum of his farts became like a rocket and shot pookie up and out that tree! Up in to the sky..till pookie could not be seen.
moral of story? dont eat beans. O_o
अगला chapter "The pookie Returns"
left front clockwise: Charlie,Alice,Hollie,Connor and Jon
