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I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what आप think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t आप see?” She कहा icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his पालना and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the पालना and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the पालना and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are आप saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They कहा that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And आप think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil कहा flatly, “He obviously has your आग using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
I've been working on a book for a while now. Im not gona post all of it at the same time, but I Will post the Prologue. Please tell me what आप think! I invite constructive criticism to make it better! THX!
Prologue
“Tanya! I don’t understand what’s so different about this kid! He’s done nothing to make me see him as special!” Tanya glowered at her obnoxious boyfriend. “Don’t आप see?” She कहा icily, “He isn’t like us!” Virgil and Tanya looked at there new child. He wiggled around in his पालना and giggled happily. The child crabbed the edge of the पालना and clung to it tightly. Suddenly, the boys’ eyes began to glow. When the glowing stopped, the boy released the पालना and continued to giggle and squirm. There was a scorch mark left on the bar from where his hand was.
Tanya looked at her hard headed boyfriend and said, “We where not like this. We didn’t giggle and squirm and go to sleep kindly. He’s soft hearted.” Virgil looked at Tanya with an expression half way between anger and sadness. “What are आप saying that we do?” Virgil asked. Tanya Looked at her child. He had her pale blue eyes and dark skin, Virgil’s snow white hair.
“I was talking to some of the other characters the other day,” Tanya said, “They told me about the Guides. They कहा that It’s getting to be the time where a child of two villains becomes a Guide.” Virgil looked at Tanya with a cool expression, “And आप think that it’s him?” Tanya looked at her boyfriend with annoyance. “It’s time for us to take the lead for a while. We villains need a turn to be triumphant.” Virgil nodded inn agreement.
“We should train him.” Virgil कहा flatly, “He obviously has your आग using abilities, and I have a strong feeling that he will be an excellent swords master.” Tanya laughed. “All in good time Virgil,” she said, “All in good time.”
this is my first story that i made on here i'm still decideing if i want to make और of this book या not i am still decideing on a tittle name.please do not hesitate to criticize i need it.thank आप <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 <3 I Taylor Ann Smith was not happy.I was very mad.How dare them! i thought angrily to myself.how dare them decide who i marry!.this all happened when i came down for breakfast."Good morning mother,good morning farther."i कहा happily.Mother was cooking eggs and टोस्ट while father was waiting."Hello darling"said Mother cheerfully as she sat a plate of eggs and टोस्ट in front of me."good morning taylor" farther answered. his plate."what's happening today?"i asked still eating."well.. mom started looked unconfertable...we decided who आप were to marry"."What!" i cried almost chocking on my food.
Glance the other way
Rip your दिल out
I just don't care anymore
You're useless
And uncaring
आप know nothing!
Yet आप pretend आप do
You're a pretender
A pretender is just a liar in disguise
A pretender is a faker
A pretender hides
A pretender is a maker
Of the dark abyss
आप told me once
I told आप twice
Now what?
Do we forget the past?
Live for the future?
या remember and continue on our path?
...Decisions...Decisions...
Left या right?
Up या down?
Wrong या right?
Please give me the answer
For I do not know
Right and wrong any longer
Rip your दिल out
I just don't care anymore
You're useless
And uncaring
आप know nothing!
Yet आप pretend आप do
You're a pretender
A pretender is just a liar in disguise
A pretender is a faker
A pretender hides
A pretender is a maker
Of the dark abyss
आप told me once
I told आप twice
Now what?
Do we forget the past?
Live for the future?
या remember and continue on our path?
...Decisions...Decisions...
Left या right?
Up या down?
Wrong या right?
Please give me the answer
For I do not know
Right and wrong any longer
Chapter 4: Sunny day
These were the days of peace and happiness.
Days were spent in peace and love.
Jack loved his job, even though he wasn't that patient with children who didn't pay attention on his classes.
But, he knew. He was doing something
important, something useful.
And most of all, he knew that his lovely wife
and beautiful little Gwenny were waiting for him
at home.
Dana was amazing at kitchen.
Jack loved everything she made.
One happy family they were.
Like every morning, Jack would go to work,
and Dana would make a breakfast and some coffee to wake them up.
Morning coffee was something wonderful
for both of them.
After having breakfast, Jack would drink coffee
with Dana, looking at her with the same gentle
and passionate प्यार that never fades.
"I'll see आप later, darling." - Jack कहा and
went to work.
Dana was still sitting and enjoying in the coffee,
watching through the window the sunlight.
She could smell the फूल that were growing
in the yard.
These were the days of peace and happiness.
Days were spent in peace and love.
Jack loved his job, even though he wasn't that patient with children who didn't pay attention on his classes.
But, he knew. He was doing something
important, something useful.
And most of all, he knew that his lovely wife
and beautiful little Gwenny were waiting for him
at home.
Dana was amazing at kitchen.
Jack loved everything she made.
One happy family they were.
Like every morning, Jack would go to work,
and Dana would make a breakfast and some coffee to wake them up.
Morning coffee was something wonderful
for both of them.
After having breakfast, Jack would drink coffee
with Dana, looking at her with the same gentle
and passionate प्यार that never fades.
"I'll see आप later, darling." - Jack कहा and
went to work.
Dana was still sitting and enjoying in the coffee,
watching through the window the sunlight.
She could smell the फूल that were growing
in the yard.
I lied
I lied to them and got caught
I confessed up and told them the truth
but they get और upset
I walk down the dark hallway
into my lonely empty room
I lie on my bed, thinking
I go to हटाइए and I can't
I fall down
pain shooting threw me
they walk in
saying I'm faking to make them feel bad
they walk out
leaving me on the ground
crying out in pain
I finally give up
crawl over to the closet
get the gun and cocked it
put it to my temple and pulled the trigger
life...filled with hate
I've chased down all my demons
but it wasn't enough
mistreated,misplaced,misunderstood.
I lied to them and got caught
I confessed up and told them the truth
but they get और upset
I walk down the dark hallway
into my lonely empty room
I lie on my bed, thinking
I go to हटाइए and I can't
I fall down
pain shooting threw me
they walk in
saying I'm faking to make them feel bad
they walk out
leaving me on the ground
crying out in pain
I finally give up
crawl over to the closet
get the gun and cocked it
put it to my temple and pulled the trigger
life...filled with hate
I've chased down all my demons
but it wasn't enough
mistreated,misplaced,misunderstood.
I keep my rhythm
I tap in time,
My संगीत is my world
An angry beat inside.
It can crash like a waterfall
या gradually trickle down,
It can make आप laugh and cry
That powerful sound.
My headphones on my head
The lyrics flowing though,
Filling up my brain
संगीत is the खाना I chew.
It can be beautiful, strange
Crazy and cool,
I couldn't live without music
There's a style to suit all.
संगीत is like a brand new life
Jumping around your mind,
Each instrument that is played
Is an ingredient to find.
There's nothing quite like music
There's nothing quite like me,
आप can always find a friend in music
संगीत will always be.
I tap in time,
My संगीत is my world
An angry beat inside.
It can crash like a waterfall
या gradually trickle down,
It can make आप laugh and cry
That powerful sound.
My headphones on my head
The lyrics flowing though,
Filling up my brain
संगीत is the खाना I chew.
It can be beautiful, strange
Crazy and cool,
I couldn't live without music
There's a style to suit all.
संगीत is like a brand new life
Jumping around your mind,
Each instrument that is played
Is an ingredient to find.
There's nothing quite like music
There's nothing quite like me,
आप can always find a friend in music
संगीत will always be.
The city of light was full of marchants and villagers. Elyon stood and gazed at them from the huge silver gate. And gurding the gate was two broad shouldered men, wearing bright white robes, that glowed from every angle.
"Excuse me?" the man with blonde hair asked. When Elyon took a shaky step forward, the men stared shocked at her.
"Elyon? What are आप doing outside the city?" The man asked. Elyon took in a deep sharp breath and took another shaky step forward. She still hadnt noticed that the vilagers were watching silently.
"Elyon...my name is..?she smiled and fell into the darknes, fainted. The two gaurds rushed to her aid, and the vilagers erupted into a panicky uproar
"Quick take her to Lady Alexsis!" the man with darker ahir nodded, picked up Elyon and disapered.
"Leo? What the hell is going on? This is a bad sign," an old man closest to the alone guard asked.
"I dont know," he muttered looking up at the गढ़, महल of light, "i really dont know,".
टिप्पणियाँ PLZ
"Excuse me?" the man with blonde hair asked. When Elyon took a shaky step forward, the men stared shocked at her.
"Elyon? What are आप doing outside the city?" The man asked. Elyon took in a deep sharp breath and took another shaky step forward. She still hadnt noticed that the vilagers were watching silently.
"Elyon...my name is..?she smiled and fell into the darknes, fainted. The two gaurds rushed to her aid, and the vilagers erupted into a panicky uproar
"Quick take her to Lady Alexsis!" the man with darker ahir nodded, picked up Elyon and disapered.
"Leo? What the hell is going on? This is a bad sign," an old man closest to the alone guard asked.
"I dont know," he muttered looking up at the गढ़, महल of light, "i really dont know,".
टिप्पणियाँ PLZ
The pain आप caused isn't what scarred me
The burning tears आप left me to shed isn't what burned me
Your last words aren't what hindered me
It was the Legend.
That endless struggle to win
To fight back
To not toss and turn in my bed
That secure feeling I had before you
To feel as a sharp as a pencil lead
Now that loneliness I feel without you
A constant reminder
Feeling my दिल beat again
Done with the breathtaking moments
And the heart-skipping kisses
To breathe again
Over and Done with
It wasn't those tears
It wasn't those words
It wasn't all that pain आप left me to bare.
It wasn't the legend आप were when आप were here
But the legacy in my दिल that आप left!
The burning tears आप left me to shed isn't what burned me
Your last words aren't what hindered me
It was the Legend.
That endless struggle to win
To fight back
To not toss and turn in my bed
That secure feeling I had before you
To feel as a sharp as a pencil lead
Now that loneliness I feel without you
A constant reminder
Feeling my दिल beat again
Done with the breathtaking moments
And the heart-skipping kisses
To breathe again
Over and Done with
It wasn't those tears
It wasn't those words
It wasn't all that pain आप left me to bare.
It wasn't the legend आप were when आप were here
But the legacy in my दिल that आप left!
