LucasMan272 - Rahvin pretty much covered my comment on your blade. It's just not unique.
Rahvin - First off, awesome that your name is one of the Forsaken from Wheel of Time (hoping that's where you got it from, love that series).
But onto the review. I'll go through each ability in turn.
Shikai 1) The real question here becomes how solid is the whip? If it's able to cause kinetic damage, then there is something solid there, and if it wraps around zanpakuto, the same applies. I'm guessing the fire wouldn't simply pass through opponents, burning them across the path it takes, but I'm uncertain exactly where it lies on the solid scale. I can make some guesses, but I think clarification is needed.
Shikai 2) Some specificity needed here as well. How much does the whip extend? Does it only extend for the duration of this attack, or does it remain extended for a period? How much of an area does the spiral cover in order to encircle the opponent? How long does the attack take to fully execute (i.e. it extends, it spirals, it constricts around the opponent)?
Bankai 1) It becomes all the more important to specify how solid it is for this. If the force of the blows increases, it's important to know what that force started at to understand where it ends up.
Bankai 2) Again, some specifics. How long does the corridor take to form? How much area does it cover? Does the flame cover everything inside the corridor? How much area outside the corridor is affected by the flames? Does the corridor constrict in the same ways as the shikai? If so, how long does that constriction take?
I'll cover your other blade tomorrow.
candy97 - There's just a lot of specifics missing here. What kind of slowing are we talking about? Can this slow attacks as well? What area is the no-moving zone? How long does it take for the slowing to take effect on someone in that zone? How long does it take for the stopping to take effect in the other zone? What is "total coldness"? How long would it take for someone to freeze to death in it? What area does that coldness happen in?
Rahvin - First off, awesome that your name is one of the Forsaken from Wheel of Time (hoping that's where you got it from, love that series).
But onto the review. I'll go through each ability in turn.
Shikai 1) The real question here becomes how solid is the whip? If it's able to cause kinetic damage, then there is something solid there, and if it wraps around zanpakuto, the same applies. I'm guessing the fire wouldn't simply pass through opponents, burning them across the path it takes, but I'm uncertain exactly where it lies on the solid scale. I can make some guesses, but I think clarification is needed.
Shikai 2) Some specificity needed here as well. How much does the whip extend? Does it only extend for the duration of this attack, or does it remain extended for a period? How much of an area does the spiral cover in order to encircle the opponent? How long does the attack take to fully execute (i.e. it extends, it spirals, it constricts around the opponent)?
Bankai 1) It becomes all the more important to specify how solid it is for this. If the force of the blows increases, it's important to know what that force started at to understand where it ends up.
Bankai 2) Again, some specifics. How long does the corridor take to form? How much area does it cover? Does the flame cover everything inside the corridor? How much area outside the corridor is affected by the flames? Does the corridor constrict in the same ways as the shikai? If so, how long does that constriction take?
I'll cover your other blade tomorrow.
candy97 - There's just a lot of specifics missing here. What kind of slowing are we talking about? Can this slow attacks as well? What area is the no-moving zone? How long does it take for the slowing to take effect on someone in that zone? How long does it take for the stopping to take effect in the other zone? What is "total coldness"? How long would it take for someone to freeze to death in it? What area does that coldness happen in?